Assignment 17A- Elevator pitch 2

Second pitch Link:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lOfYLyR4bpg Reflection on past feedback:
Based on many of the comments on my last pitch one thing that stood out as important was the way I put the viewer in the situation I was describing. It seemed like it made the viewer care more about the product because it wasn't as if I was purely selling them something. One of the comments that surprised me the most was one where they told me that they found the way in which I presented the product to be interesting. This surprised me because  I felt very stiff and uncomfortable while doing the pitch. However, if that is the way people want to see a pitch I can get used to it. There were no comments that I thought were outright unfair or silly. They all seemed to be thought out and truthful comments. The most useful comment was most certainly the one where they told me that putting people into the situation to make them care for the product was intriguing. This is because it helped to give me a clear strategy of what I need to do during my pitches.
What I changed this time:
Based on the previous feedback I tried to keep the strategy of putting the viewer into the situation in order to make them care about the product. I also tried to be a little more animated and lively so that people don't get bored of the pitch. I kept many the things the same from the last pitch because a lot of the feedback I received was what people thought I had done right. There were very few comments on what I did wrong or what could be improved. One thing I tired working on with this pitch was feeling more comfortable and less stiff in order to make the pitch seem more organic and natural.