Assignment 22A- Elevator pitch 3

Link to pitch:
https://youtu.be/MVDPr6u199k Reflection on feedback:
One of the things that I thought that was important was keeping the viewers interested in the pitch. I tried to do this by doing the same thing I had done in the past pitches which is put the viewer in the situation. I believe this engages and makes viewers more likely to internalize what your saying. The part of the feedback that was most surprising was how much people seemed to find it intriguing. The product I am pitching is not the most interesting but people seem to look past that and focus on the pitch. There wasn't any feedback that I would say is wrong or incorrect. I believe that all the feedback I received was well thought out and was truly meant as valid criticism.
What I changed:
With this being my third pitch I felt much more comfortable in front of the camera and I tried showing this by being less stiff and static. I also tried changing the tone of my voice to sound less panicked or uncomfortable. To this point I had to rehearse multiple times in order to somewhat memorize my pitch. After all the pitches I pretty much had the script I had thought up memorized. I do believe that my pitch has gotten better throughout all of the ones I have done. I believe this because I constantly felt more comfortable and was able to do minor tweaks throughout. I think that all of these things made the pitch better.